Interesting topic, however the pivotal points are maybe to slw or not enough emotion. Try adjusting the area of the keyframes, maybe that will help. Also, try adding some sound effects instead of just plain music to add more emotion. (Believe me, I need to start this too.)
I think you should try moving on from animatics to full motion. However, I must put that I love the voice acting!! Very clever and creative!! Just take what I said as advice!...
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